The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author of this argument claims that the number of the shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing due to the increase of the skateboarding. To access the efficacy of the claim, some questions need answers.
The memo states that lots of Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is because of the skateboard users. However, we need more information about this issue. We cannot certainly consider that the decrease in their business is due to the skateboard users. It is possible that people change their predilection, and they did not want to buy the same things all the time. They want to change their favor so they just bought the same things in the other stores. For instance, the customer usually have lots of different clothes from their different favorite stores. We do not know predilection of the customer because they change anytime.
The authors claims that skateboard users left lots of litter and did vandalism in Central Plaza, and it is an important reason which affected the business of store owners. Still, What if the litter and vandalism were not created by skateboard users? It is possible that other people left the garbage and did the vandalism. These activities are easy for anyone to do. For example, these activities can be done by people who went to shop or some people who just passed through there.
Furthermore, the author says that prohibiting the skateboarding can increase the business in Central Plaza. A supposition here is that the author predict that the business is affected by skateboarding. However, what if the skateboarding is not the reason that decreased the business of stores? if it is true, then, this strategy is so weak that the business of stores still cannot increase like before.
The author needs to answer the above questions to strengthen his or her argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 312 350
No. of Characters: 1510 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.203 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.84 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.557 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.04 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.389 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 13, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'claim'.
Suggestion: claim
... they change anytime. The authors claims that skateboard users left lots of litt...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 295, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... that decreased the business of stores? if it is true, then, this strategy is so w...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, so, still, then, for example, for instance, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1570.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 312.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03205128205 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6389087857 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471153846154 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6483447992 57.8364921388 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.6315789474 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4210526316 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21052631579 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197876927716 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639179516814 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959451358037 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113196675605 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795155212773 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 98.500998004 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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