The best way for society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

While some people might say that cooperation is the best way to prepare students or juvenile for leadership in different companies or government, other people seem to disagree with it. In my opinion, I believe that the competition is the best way for juvenile, not cooperation.

To begin with, competition can make juvenile have lots of pressure to finish the missions. To specific, it is important for young people that if they have a pressure, they can come out more special idea and be a successful leader. For example, I was a basketball team leader in my college. I have lots of pressure since we have to compete with other college during the semester. This pressure made me be serious to every basketball game. I chose my teammates carefully, and trained them very hard. What's more? I contrive lots of different strategies to face any situations, and we practiced basketball five days per week. We eventually won several games during the semester. Thus, I think competition is the important factor for poeple to be a leader.

The second point is that young people can learn lots of knowledge when they have competition. For instance, my friend, Alex, who established a company by himself. Lots of same type of companies compete with him. He meet lots of successful people to ask some advice, and he learn some skill about how to win the competition. Finally, he not only make lots of profits, but learn lots of different knowledge. He even wants to establish another company. Thus, I think competition can make people ba successful and learn lots of different knowledge.

True, some people might say that if young people do not know how to cooperate, ot they just want to compete with other people, they may not understand how to be a leader since they do not know how to resolve problems with other people. However, this belief fools to consider the fact that if they compete with other people, they will have lots of pressure and be incited from that pressure. After the competition, juvenile must be stronger than before, and they will naturally learn to be a leader. It is important that if young people just know how to cooperate with other people, they cannot have special ideas or ways because they have no pressure. Thus, It is hard to convince people of this idea.

To sum up, whith the reasons mentioned above, I believe that competition is the best way to prepare young people for leadership in industry or other fields.There seems to be some validity to other points of view. However, I still believe that the reasons for my opinion are stronger.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, second, so, still, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2140.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 445.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80898876404 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6360939454 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442696629213 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 6.24550561798 368% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.7251441762 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.56 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241653017258 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06966920224 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851417755038 0.0758088955206 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185614430092 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125942957195 0.0667264976115 189% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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