The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment building to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers were modified to restrict the water flow to approximately one-third of its original flow. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, restricting water flow throughout all the twenty floors of Sunnyside Towers will increase our profits further."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In this argument, the author claims that restricting water flow can increase profits of company. We immediately found out there are several logical mistakes throughout whole article. My reasons can be substantiated by the incoming comments.
the author says that actual readings of water usage are not available but changing the water flow to one-third of its original flow will result in a considerable savings. However, what if the expenses after the adjustment are not change? it is possible that the fee of water is same as usual. When people used the water, they thought the water was small than before so they spent more time using the water. The expenses of the water would not change.
The memos states that only few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. However, What if there are few complaints just because people did not report? Nowadays, people usually busy with their work, they might not have time to complaint lots of issues. There are only few complaints did not mean that there did not have any problem. Thus, this question need to be answered.
The author suggests that restricting water flow throughout all the twenty floors of Sunnyside Towers will increase its profits. Nevertheless, that is not to say, restricting the water flow throughout all the twenty floors can be successful even though restricting the water flow on the first five floor truly saved the money. What if people who staying on others floor using more water than people staying in the first five floor? we need answers to know which floor of people using more water.
To sum up, the author would need to answer these questions to make valid of his or her argument. Without answers, we cannot jump to the conclusion that restricting the water flow throughout all the twenty floors of Sunnyside Towers will increase its profits.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1532 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.833 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.367 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 68 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.608 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.471 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.347 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ntiated by the incoming comments. the author says that actual readings of wat...
^^^
Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...es after the adjustment are not change? it is possible that the fee of water is sa...
^^
Line 9, column 11, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'state'.
Suggestion: state
... water would not change. The memos states that only few complaints about low wate...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 432, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...people staying in the first five floor? we need answers to know which floor of peo...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, third, thus, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01577287066 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45108177117 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511041009464 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6237809632 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6842105263 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6842105263 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224923159699 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696336975846 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921197474229 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128729727159 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100041822139 0.0628817314937 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.