Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enoug

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Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.

In this argument, the arthor claims that the populations of Arctic deer live on lslands decline because of the recent global warming. The argument seems to be some validity at the first glance, but we immediately found out several logical mistakes. My reasons can be substantiated by the incoming comments:

The author claims that the recent report from local hunters revealed that the deer populations are declined. However, we need more evidence about this issue. Since we do not know how many samples they used, and how did they do the test, it is not true that the contents of report from the local hunters are thr truth. What if the hunters just be halfhearted to collect the sample? They did not have the precise instruments to record the numbers of the deer. For example, if the climate report from the college students says that there is going to have a typhoon tomorrow, people probably would not believe them. They need to provide more precise data and the ways that they use to record.

Even if the report is true that the populations of the deers are declined. That is not to say that we need to worry about this decline. What if the populations of the deer just decreased from one hundred to ninety-nine? It is not a big number which can be enough to affect the whole populations. Thus, we need more evidence about the contents of the report.

The author also says that the populations of the deer declined because of the global warming trends that they have caused the sea ice to melt and the deer cannot across the island. However, we still need more evidence about this issue. What if the population decline is because of others reasons? For instance, if the populations of the predators of the deer increase, the deer will be ate more than before. It is highly possible reason to explicate this issue. Therefore, we still need more evidence about this argument.

To sum up, the author would have to provide more evidence to make valid assumptions he provided. Without such evidence, we cannot jump to the conclusion that the populations of deer decreased because of global warming. All in all, if the author provides more precise evidence and mends the logical mistakes. Then, the argument will be more persuasive.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 675, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...ore precise data and the ways that they use to record. Even if the report is ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the ways that they use to record. Even if the report is true that the populations...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7969151671 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46158959721 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442159383033 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3438132046 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.75 119.503703932 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2083333333 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.20833333333 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119875722946 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347922103517 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450980276351 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0664410959814 0.128457276422 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372495989296 0.0628817314937 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 98.500998004 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1798 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.622 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.355 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.56 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.917 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.489 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5