Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
As the time goes on, the fields of arts and sports has burgeoning. they become more and more essential as something that people can do in their leisure time and also on the other hand can be relaxed by doing them in the hectic society. Both of such these activities need high money rather than the other activities. The vast majority of people are of the opinion that not only the arts are important for making history of one society, but also sports can do the same. The inevitable question which has always caused heated debate among people is whether governments should spend more money for the arts or their athletics as a support? I contrary to the popular beliefs, contend that it is more important to spend more money for the athletics of a society. In the following paragraphs, two conspicuous reasons will cogently substantiate this perspective.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that athletics as a part of society who are supported by the government can be embody having healthy life for the people of a society. For example, when I was a child, I pursued to watch every play of my favorite football team. The player of them were my hero. I wanted to be someone like them. so that, I did some sports to have strong body. And also, I cared about my lifestyle such as eating healthy food, sleeping on time, etc. In this way, a society will have healthy people which will need less medical services.
Another equally important point is if people embody athletics, they will be more active. For example, when the people of society do daily exercise, they will become more strong and fresh. During the exercise, the negative thoughts will run away from you and you can decide about your problems better after that. so that, your productivity in the ambient of your work will be increased.
To make a long story short, I think it is better for a government to spend more money on their athletics, so that it can have healthier and more active people. In this way, government support them, which will be pay back by the people of society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, for example, i think, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66393442623 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43570002185 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497267759563 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 534.6 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1965276382 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.35 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211088661855 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643596700636 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855055653295 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140891089154 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979187015448 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.16 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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