Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In modern life, there are several ways that we can communicate with each other or do our works. The best way is the way which is more economical during this hectic life. In my point of view, I think it is better than the government spends more money on improving access to the internet. In the below paragraphs I explain my point of view by mentioning two reasons.
First, I think widespread accessibility to the internet could cause people to do all their stuff at home and there is no need to transport vehicles. In line with this view, less using transport vehicles will result in reducing air pollution. For example, with software which is based on the internet, I can pay all the bills for my house such as water, gas, electricity. And I would not stock at the traffic which causes air pollution. Before this time, I compelled to stay in a row at the bank for paying my bills, which was making me tired and annoying.
Second, the improvement of the internet could help us to save our time. For example, for writing my thesis, I need a lot of resources. if I want to go to university every day and use paper-based resources, it would take me a lot of time. And also, it is much harder to search for resources in a huge library with a variety of fields. So, I use the internet and search my title by keywords, to find resources. it also makes me capable to get access to date resources.
To make a story short, I think it is more influential if the government spends its money to improve internet services in order to make an atmosphere that people can do all their stuff at home and help them to save their time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, for example, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46357615894 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5424771714 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533112582781 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 416.7 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9357346948 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.25 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.875 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204925963491 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683848345755 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768677503841 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12993521294 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334283389656 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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