Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Do people spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things while spend lesser time on things they should do? I totally disagree on that. The social media misleads us that people enjoy their time and play all the time. We sometimes ignore the efforts that people pay to get the rewards. Moreover, the new type of jobs enable people working and playing at the same time so we cannot distinct what things they should do.

As the social media rises, people tend to express their delightful side of their life on the Internet. Every time when we open the Facebook or other social media's page, it is hard to see people posting their hard-working photo but filled with enjoyment and travel experiences. It makes sense that people want others to see them as happy and have the freedom to enjoy their hobbies even though those are not the whole part in their daily life.

We can see people's success easily while barely find those preparation behind the achievements. When a CEO or a celebrity driving his sports car across the street, only very few of us can explore and pay the same hard working before the car was purchased. People do things they should do as usual where we are not able to see.

Many modern jobs make people get paid while doing their hobbies. For example, blog writers, youtubers, and opinion leaders. Those up-and-coming jobs mainly need people to promote their lives and cooperative manufacturers. In that case, the boundary between things they should do and they like to do can be erase.

The global trend confused us that people entertain too much and work too less at times. Albeit the social network replete with entertainment, this is not the evidence that people are always having fun. It is human nature that we only what to share the bright side to the world. Also, modern jobs can bring salaries to those who enjoy personal enjoyment-doing things. We are doing things we should do as the same.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'mislead'.
Suggestion: mislead
...ally disagree on that. The social media misleads us that people enjoy their time and pla...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this preparation' or 'those preparations'?
Suggestion: this preparation; those preparations
...eoples success easily while barely find those preparation behind the achievements. When a CEO or ...
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Line 5, column 58, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s success easily while barely find those preparation behind the achievements. Whe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74777448071 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38412111585 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545994065282 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.907782842 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.85 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.35 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400533622107 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139545897787 0.076458572812 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.176069189955 0.0737576698707 239% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252221213273 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13344448922 0.0645574589148 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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