Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people believe that today humans spend much time on personal enjoyment because of easy access to recreational medium like mobile, televisions, and computers. However, I disagree with the statement and think that in the 21st century, people are now more engaged in doing required assignments than before for the following reasons.
First of all, in this technological era, people have to do more tasks because of the availability of the resources and communication networks. For example, in the last week, I took a short vacation from my office. However, in every moment, coworker, and the boss called me for information on various tasks. On the other hand, before, if people went for a break, they could enjoy without any interruptions. Now, one can perform a lot of works within the limited amounts of time because of the advanced medium. But it does not mean that they get free time, but they need to work more. Even people carry their official work in the home and do it through the internet. Therefore, humans life becomes more complex and busy.
Secondly, people are now engaging to become highly competitive, and for this reason, they perform more tasks efficiently and effectively. To become more successful in the career, they do a lot of works than requirements. For instance, my coworker stayed in the office till late at night, and even in the lunch break, they try to do work. In contrast, a few years back, they used to do gossip in the lunch time and tried to leave the office earlier. People give more focus on gaining more professional success instead of personal pleasure.
In third, leisure activities often fall in the realm of necessary obligations. People use their free time as doing exercise or playing football, soccer, and the reason behind such work is to become more healthy and able to perform more necessary tasks. For example, I spend my weekend in the local gym, swimming, or playing basketball with my husband. It gives me personal satisfaction, part of why I do this to become stronger and competent. Therefore, people's recreation often turns into personal improvements.
In conclusion, it can say that people spend more time on obliged activities rather than personal refreshments because of the advancement of technology, competition, and self-improvement. In a recent survey of New York University showed that more than 60 percent of people spend more time on required tasks and less time in pleasure.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 240, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rom my office. However, in every moment, coworker, and the boss called me for inf...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01715686275 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81400622874 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531862745098 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6670932958 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0454545455 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5454545455 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86363636364 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307173405233 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932701427485 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687259256746 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192818027921 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575151311854 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.