Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people believe that extended family is no more necessary as before because of the easy communication technology and increasing pace of life. However, I disagree with the statement and think that in the 21st century relationship with the broaden family members is most valuable factor for the following reasons.
First of all, living in the expanded family gives people more mental peace than the past. Because people are now involving more competition in the profession to become more successful, which makes life borning and exhausted. Contacting with the grabparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles at the end of the day helps people to overcome tiredness. For example, I live in a broad family and we all do dinner together, and then we discuss various interesting issues, make fun, that relieves my tiredness after a long hectic day. In contrast, if I live in a nuclear family, I hardly get this pleasant environment, where everyone is more self-centerd and busy in their own tasks. This way, extended family members are more pshychologically happy than others.
Secondly, there are a lot of advantages of living with large family. As now all people are working outside in the family, therefore, living in a broad familly leverages people to lessen the burden of household chores. For instance, in my family, we are 10 members, all are working or studying except my parents, but we are doing the household task together and can complete it within a very short time. It also increases our bond. While working, we chatt each other, and it turns into a fun. On the other hand, if there are 4 family members, then it might be the huge burden of doing all tasks and can not gossip which in turn makes people lives ridiculous. Granchildren gets a huge opportuity to learn more about past culture, tradition from their grandparents.
In conclusion, in this competitive era, extended family members help people to live more peacefully and joyously. A recent study of New York University have showed that people who are living with all other family members are mentally more competent than others who live in a small family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...tal peace than the past. Because people are now involving more competition in the profession to b...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96638655462 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70510801941 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565826330532 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.40528756 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.294117647 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58823529412 5.45110844103 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129006803312 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047292161603 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397591196509 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.094058303372 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363602938104 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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