Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, No one cast doubt upon the entertainment activities has paramount significance in the society and families, It is becoming quite trendy among all people. It is my empathetic belief that individuals do not attend to things they should do; rather, they prefer to doing the personal enjoyment-task. If I were asked to determine a couple of reasons standing behind my points of view, I strongly suggest that the nature of human being and evolution of thereof, there are more time to leisure, and the demand to surpass the depression of human in the recent time may be reasons of these theory. I will manifest my reasons in the subsequent paragraphs.
It is without an adumbration of doubts that the nature of human seem to be a lazy one, thereby putting their duty and responsibility off, and spend much their time to the enjoyment and fun, it is difficult to carry out such thing that a human do not like; It is boring and mundane. my personal example is compelling evidence for what I mean; when I was working in Automotive company at my twenties- 20 years ago- I personally decided to resign, in that those quotidian task made me boring one, hence I decided to resign and make better future by doing whatever I want to do.
It also goes without declaring that nowadays people by means of technology and improvement of life quality of human life can spend too much time to their entertainment. nonetheless, they spent more money to their enjoyment rather that the past entertainment. to be more specific; In the shot down of the Coronavirus, the more people works online in the night hours and assign your day day time to hiking, sports, watching movies, camping and so on. not only are these enjoyments vantage to task doing quality, but lead labors to a unique creativeness.
It can be summed up in accentuating that everyone spend most of your time to satisfaction of your demands such as enjoyment for doing task and duty recently. the evolution of human being's nature, enough more time, depression of human being lead to such a situation.
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- TOEFL TPO 17 - Integrated Writing Task 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mpathetic belief that individuals do not attend to things they should do; rather,...
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Line 1, column 273, Rule ID: PREFER_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'do'?
Suggestion: do
... they should do; rather, they prefer to doing the personal enjoyment-task. If I were ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eof, there are more time to leisure, and the demand to surpass the depression of ...
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Line 1, column 588, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this theory' or 'these theories'?
Suggestion: this theory; these theories
...an in the recent time may be reasons of these theory. I will manifest my reasons in the subs...
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Line 3, column 283, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: My
... do not like; It is boring and mundane. my personal example is compelling evidence...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Nonetheless
...d too much time to their entertainment. nonetheless, they spent more money to their enjoyme...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: To
...ent rather that the past entertainment. to be more specific; In the shot down of t...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: day
...line in the night hours and assign your day day time to hiking, sports, watching movies...
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Line 6, column 469, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'enjoyments'' or 'enjoyment's'?
Suggestion: enjoyments'; enjoyment's
..., camping and so on. not only are these enjoyments vantage to task doing quality, but lead...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...yment for doing task and duty recently. the evolution of human beings nature, enoug...
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Line 9, column 182, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...d duty recently. the evolution of human beings nature, enough more time, depression of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, nonetheless, so, i mean, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78431372549 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79794497879 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549019607843 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.3794313037 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.333333333 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.75 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321832439493 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119711058168 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129020133307 0.0737576698707 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196029235895 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522111550437 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.