Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays people have a lot of entertainment than before. Furthermore, we agreed that we should have a bit of enjoyment, but people tend to take more than they should entertaining themself. Which creates new problem with it. I believe that people should spent more time doing things that they should do instead of wasting a lot of time in their personal enjoyment. This essay will discuss why I choose my believe by the following points.
First of all, the individual tends escape their problem by entertaining themself. Moreover, this practice will not make it disappear, in fact, it only worsens it. So, they have to do what they should do to solve the problem. I remember one time with my younger brother. He was bullied in school and he did not do anything about it, and when he arrives to home, he sits in front of the tv to relax and not do any homework. After while we saw that his grades are worse than before when we sit with him, he finally confesses and faced it and his grade were up again.
In addition, if people spent so much time in enjoying themself their quality of life will not enhance. Moreover, they should lean different things instead of wasting their time to improve their career path to succeed in life and get promotion in their work.
Finally, people should know how to restrain themself in order to deal with the world. Furthermore, If we spent too much time on thing we like we cannot face any struggle we might have in life. As a result, we should improve our way of handling things that we do not like by spending more time on things we should do.
To sum up, my opinion is that people should spend less time in entertainment and do what they should do for multiple reasons. one of the reasons is they might worsen the problem that they are escaping from it. Another one is their quality of life will not be better. Finally, people should know to control what is important to them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, while, in addition, in fact, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52722063037 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36190764616 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489971346705 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.3503438773 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.45 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375980237581 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11606290872 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125755409081 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22320787174 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065107991698 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.