Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, success is one of the most vital goals in people's life. Having different skills helps people manage their lives' condition in a well organized way which it leads to success. While some people believe that focusing on one major provides them an striaghtforward way to achive thier personal goals, others try to learn as much as skills that they could to be successful. In my opinion, having a great amount of abilities help folks to succeed in their lives' trajectory. In what follows, I will delve into my reasons.
First, the more skills one person has, the more job situations they could apply. Therefore, they are able to make money in a blooming and even down-time conditions of economy. An individual who can work in different fields based on his capabilities is more likely to be at work, since if one work does not want them. As a result, they will seek for other types of job and will find themselves at work very soon. For starter, my brother who was a good musician and work as an accountant in a big firm, had experienced this kind of challange when his company moved to other country. He was out of work for one year, but thanks to his abilities, he could make ends meet by palying an instrument in different clubs and ceremonies. Had he not had those multitiude applicable abilities, he would have suffered form being jobless in that time.
Second, learning divers experties enlists both brain hemispheres in individuales which leads to having stronger intellectual abilities. This end up being able to manage their lives in a successful fashion. For example, when I was student in university and studied pharmacy, one of my classmates, who was a genious student, not only did he studied his pharmacy major, but also learned computer science at a profesional level. After graduation, he continued both his experties and even learned managering strategies in a well-known company he worked there. He launched his website to offer pharmacies all around the country a unique application software, through which pharmacies were able to manage their cost in a fantastic approach. Since he was a pharmacist and fan of computer stuff, he was able to bridge this domains and launch his outstanding product. He got rich by selling his product and frenchis in a short time. In contrast, his peers,like me, who just work in pharmacy, never could reach this kind of success in our horizon.
All in all, I strongly believe that people with more skills are prone to succeed. This is because they are able to make a living in different economy situations. And because they are able to see new opportunities by understanding diverse contexts and invent new products and hit their goals in a short matter of time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in contrast, kind of, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2257.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8329764454 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74345270522 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539614561028 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6810921015 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1304347826 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3043478261 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17391304348 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142304923292 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464313495973 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057627261415 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997367356296 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445794270048 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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