Well, in my opinion, I would definitely agree with the statement that people who develop many different skills are more successful than other people because of the following reasons.
First, the most important reason for such an assertion is that people who developed many different skills have a better chance to gain a job. The job market is very competitive. Many companies need employees who have a lot of different skills such as social skills, managing skills, and language skills, this helps them to have better job opportunities than people who focus on one skill only as well as having different skills help people to find a well-paid job. learning various skills, gives a significant opportunity to individuals to become more creative and thus this creativity provides a good atmosphere to become more productive, On the other hand, concentrating on only one skill, not only is more boring but also is an obstacle to being productive.
Second, developing different skills allows the student to have a lot of chances to get admission from universities. They can apply to many different programs and get the best position than others. My best friend Sara can speak three languages and play the piano, this helps her to find more than one Ph.D. program that includes music programs and literature in US universities and Europe Universities.
Third, learning different skills causes make fewer mistakes and takes less risk, because when people focus on just one skill. they will probably find a few or no solution for their problems, thus if they want to gain any solution, they will try many things that causes make mistakes and take a risk. Imagine a customer service just focus on social skills and have not any other skills that require these careers, you will see he or she can't do his job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
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...e these careers, you will see he or she cant do his job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, third, thus, well, such as, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95723684211 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60120422451 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552631578947 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.268445201 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.0 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6363636364 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.63636363636 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.446022136714 0.236089414692 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158207167801 0.076458572812 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113416902104 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261961271074 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0999399901266 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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