The swift development of technology has been bringing us many phenomena like the demand for immigration to have sophisticated life and better access to facilities which are truly rational to be considered. But at the same time, you would face with tones of unaccustomed events and fluctuations in that major city. although, I must admit that I believe in high-speed growth and achievements after moving from your native village or town. The following is the clarification of above statements.
First, the better access to vast varieties of facilities is really tantalizing and vigorously difficult to keep your desires away from them. I mean, just imagine a village with its fresh air, organic food, the sound of roosters before dawn, minus the rapid unlimited internet connection!. For me, it sounds like a disaster. This is the main source of interminable information which keeps your personal, educational, and business life moving forward. The whole modern world is depended on this technology and the evolution of individuals are relying on that. The internet is one of our rudimentary necessities which makes our path to success smoother; the fact is that there are many other examples of better conveniences which are not provided yet in small town and villages but the necessity of having them in our contemporary life is uncompromising.
Second, people would have more job opportunities, and consequently, they attain more money which its huge impact on happiness is undeniable. For instance, I remember, two years ago my friend was really despondent about his financial situation since he was working as an Uber driver in Fullerton which is almost small and quiet city around L.A and he couldn't afford his life's expenses. fortunately, he dared to move to L.A which has brought up a great shift in his economic state by having more riders. He has been able not only pay all of his credit cards debt but also altering his worn out car with brand new Hyundai and save for his dream vacation to Mexico with his girlfriend. I could see the sparkle of happiness in his eyes when I met him two weeks ago. As my friend's experience convinced me to advocate the concept of moving from your small native town to have a more delightful life.
Finally, the advantages of moving from small towns or villages like the access to better facilities are making more sense so far for me and I believe that is the big plunge into the interminable possibilities, happiness, and success.
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... his eyes when I met him two weeks ago. As my friends experience convinced me to a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, really, second, so, for instance, i mean
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98557692308 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86247916713 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591346153846 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8965845973 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4705882353 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147571367241 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460030701139 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453261679663 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0946724841311 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206022187699 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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