TPO 36- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universit

The quality of education is the paramount evaluation mechanism to estimate the societies upcoming development's scale. Due to its critical magnitude, the abundance of questions always exists among the economists, sociologists, government's opposite parties, or even the civilians about whether their national budgets ought to be expended for their primary and middle schools(children between five to ten years old) or the universities. Nevertheless, some critics declare it is more thoughtful if that money goes for the fundamental columns of society who are the very young age adolescents in schools, there are growing objections against that notion. Admittedly, I want to hold the advocacy for the second group who raise their hand for universities. Through ensuing paragraphs, the precise details of my idea will be elaborate.

First and foremost, no one can cast the shadow on the fact that qualified and effective education in universities in various majors needs the higher amount of equipment and facilities than primary or middle schools. Practically, our children don't need complicated and perplexed supplies for learning rudimentary knowledge in drawing, sports, math, biology, and so forth. Their school's mentors and administrators merely need to provide basic and efficacious tools to thrive their creative and solution making mind. They can utilize way too simple ways to strike their eagerness for learning. In fact, the educational system is responsible for hiring more professional instructors to elevate their schools quality instead of spending more money to equip the schools. Besides, the pediatric psychologists stipulate that our children's growth in schools needs more flexibilities by their teachers, delightful and easy environment which is along with playing simple games. So as you see a developing government can accelerate the schools' standards by very simple but organized alterations.

On the other hand, the facilitated universities are one of the most necessary and vital requirements of any developmental nations. Some of the conductive points about the facilities are the necessity of the sophisticated research labs, libraries, clinical trials' tools, and etc. For illustration, the physics professors are not effectively able to clarify Albert Einstein's relatively idea without the assistance of the advanced computing programs in a truly equipped physics laboratory, and it is not far-fetched their attempts to convey their knowledge to their students will be annihilated hip and tight!. A knowledgeable progressive society crave huge amount of funds for their universities, otherwise, they should witness a mountain of unskilled and naive graduated potentials with the insufficient efficiency in their future positions.

In brief, all the aforementioned arguments lead us to the conclusion that spending money on the education of students in university is more costly but beneficial in long-term for the developing societies' profits since they need knowledgeable and adroit graduates who can propagate their information toward the nation as job holders and make their country better place to live.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, in brief, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2664.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 469.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68017057569 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15101515169 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601279317697 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 819.0 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.6395439496 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.705882353 100.406767564 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5882352941 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202617363935 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629245371148 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557570820333 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126414637787 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524403882675 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 11.7677419355 162% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.96 10.9000537634 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.16 8.01818996416 127% => OK
difficult_words: 154.0 86.8835125448 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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