Television advertising directed children toward young children (aged 2 to 5) should not be allowed
The technology has had unimaginable impact on our daily life and no one is untouched by its extremely swift development no matter adolescents or aged people. One of the outmost conflicts about engaging of technology in our life is about the effect of TV on our children and how we can reduce or omit the disadvantage of this big screen which has changed into a necessary belonging of our houses. One of the recent debates is if the advertising should address our children directly or not. Many have held the skeptical view about this issue and some has pointed bright sides in contrast with the first group. From my point of view, the harmful aspects of TV advertisement on our babies is uncompromising and it should get into consideration not to sacrifice our children’s bests for the money matters.
The first and foremost, the advertisement might promote something detrimental for our children mental health or even physical well-being as the most present companies do not take our children’s safety before their profits. For instance, I remember about my niece who were going real danger after watching a tv promotion about a trendy kind of playdoh and getting so excited about having. He used to insist his parents to buy that for him every time they had shown the Add. Finally, my sister got convinced to purchase it online with a very special offer for Christmas as the gift that she was profoundly certain will make his son super happy unaware of the terrifying circumstances which was going to happen shortly for her beloved one. That Christmas was one of the most frightful holydays for all our family since Arsha(my niece) went through a harsh medical problem for almost a month as he had shown formidable allergic reaction after playing with that playdoh and hundreds of itchy blisters popped up on his skin and he could hardy breath. The clinicians had to get him Corten to suppress the allergen and help him inhale and exhale better. From that experience, I would not to recommend the parents to let their childes get impressed by the Tv Adds which might have disastrous impact on their health by any means.
Second, the direction of tv promotion toward our offspring between age 2 to 5 will make them to believe that the tv is a reliable source to reach out their needs in future which is not a right fact in reality. As the explanation for my point of view I want to elaborate that the tv programs is a business based on corruption which has been run by grid and lie to manipulate innocent people by fake new and falsehood stories about the world. I am certain that this untrustworthy kind of media can not get any credit as genuine origin for our young generation specially our infants to trust for their necessities. As our children between 2 to 5 years old can be resemble of a fertile individual who can grow anything which is seeds on their unconscious mind, they need to be addressed to any trustful source but not tv shows for their basic information about the world.
In conclusion, I believe that the tv advertisements should not direct the very young age children as it has noxious impacts on their physical health and besides, it would program their mind to rely on its illusive programs and promotion which has been getting manipulated by giddy business owners and politicians who just take their benefits into the accounts not our beloved offspring. Finally, I recommend the parents to prevent their children to watch advertisements which address them directly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, if, second, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2907.0 1977.66487455 147% => OK
No of words: 605.0 407.700716846 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80495867769 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95951083803 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73704934361 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504132231405 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 882.0 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.9920263414 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.5 100.406767564 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6111111111 20.6045352989 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177758550831 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675050768965 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828783228147 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130585798342 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573594972546 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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