Do you agree or disagree ?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged 2 to 5) should not be allowed.
In the modern era, technology is being developed at a galloping rate. This breakthrough has resulted in many aspects of people’s lives. One of the most challenging of big societies is the way that they can make a balance between technology and its side effects. Nowadays, you cannot overlook Television’s role among families. The controversial question which arises here is whether television should allow the producers to show anything that they want or they should obey some rules. As far as I am concerned, director of TV shows should pay a lot more heed toward young children whom are exposed to the TV’s advertisements. In the following paragraphs, my viewpoint will be elucidated through two remarkable reasons.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that children play a prominent role in each societies. They are the assets of each society, and they are more vulnerable compared to adults. Also, parents are occupied with their hectic life so they may assume that they can provide a great pastime for their children by TV. There is no doubt that companies plan efficient ways to attract their clients as well as there is no difference that who watches their program. Let me give you some hints which might make the matter more evident. For example, the famous company, Coca cola, has many various ways for advertisement around the world. There are numerous ways that they can give you incentive to use their products, but it is axiomatic that this is not fair and objective that they utilize cartoons for more benefits. For instance, they use favorite personality of children in cartoons, while she drinks coca cola every day. By visual effects, they impress children to drink it. As a matter of fact, a myriad of children will ask their parents to buy them or will consume it without any permission by themselves. It is obvious that they are not familiar with detrimental effects of that.
The second noteworthy reason is that children are not educated at this age. These days one of the big issues in primary schools is that teachers try to teach children in affordable ways to highlight the importance of healthy lifestyle for students. In consequence, by educating our children, they might avoid the mistakes about the concept of the advertisements. Furthermore, Recent researches show that children who were supposed to watch advertisements, and were not aware of its deleterious effects, not only can they not change their belief about the concept that they learned from the advertisement during their school’s year, but also they will suffer its detrimental impacts in their adulthood. Had producers not provided advertisements for children, they would not face these sophisticated problems.
To bring everything into conclusion, it is highly suggested that governments should not allow producers to offer their products through channels and programs that can affect children.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, no doubt, as a matter of fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2444.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13445378151 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88411025147 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556722689076 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7164596703 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.833333333 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.79166666667 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149459471566 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453309471102 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035453612287 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0982731161193 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410802798346 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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