Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Many have come to acknowledge the worth of Family bonding and its outstanding impact on societies' cultural stability. Through recent modernized era, we have observed many cultural transformations which may affect the depth of our relationship with the family members. Many believe that the extended family like grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncle are not as important as they were before. As far as I am concerned, it is true as people are very busy to consume their time, energy, and temper for others but their very close family.
First, our lifestyle has transformed to adapt to the modern hectic life. Therefore, we are occupied with variable burdens rather the past. People need to work two jobs to afford their expenses and consequently, they do not have enough time commit for other people. The time shortage, makes it as worthy as gold, that people prefer to use it for their priorities like hanging out with their very close relatives. Therefore, spending time for the extended family may get compromised as it looks unnecessary.
Second, rather than the time, this busy lifestyle makes us worn and exhausted. Accordingly, we prefer to stay at home and enjoy our spare time as tranquil as possible and the only people that we can stand are the mom, dad, husband, and children. Moreover, people believe that it is more beneficial if they devote their remained time for working out, watching tv, or jogging with their pet instead which revive their lost energy. It may not seem reasonable to squander our scarce time for the extended family.
Third, a very inevitable drawback of our contemporary world is that people tend to keep their life private and limit their relationships to stay away from the troubles that exposure to many people may cause. For instance, my cousins and I had used to gather together every two months since I was a teenager. But we have had no such gathering since last five years. In fact, we had hesitated call each other gradually and has shot a text just in case. Admittedly, I do not like to be asked about what I am doing, when I am getting married, why I am losing weight, etc. I prefer less inevitable interferes which may happen through relationships with your extended family.
Last but not least, I must admit that I have come to accept, having close contact with the extended family is not as vital as it was before, and I consider that it is not necessary to stay in touch with them all the time. Indeed, it is better to keep it limited and occasional.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...athering since last five years. In fact, we had hesitated call each other gradual...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, for instance, in fact, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7908045977 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59295059466 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5469309412 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2380952381 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136033719667 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452022833282 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564232803481 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0825243012956 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0269464550951 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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