Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
One of the most crucial subjects for any educational system like universities, colleges, private or public schools is about their financial issues, receiving fund, and the way these systems need to imply the money. As the merits and demerits of an educational community are based on the funds that its various departments get, so it has been crucial for students, professors, and many parents to know about its details. A controversial question is whether sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support? In may vantage point they have comparable worth as their impacts outstandingly on students' physical and emotional health. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate on the reasons behind this notion.
First, social activities will boost students' emotional mood substantially. For instance, a friend of mine who is studying Mathematics in Colombia university which is in New York City told me that one of the schools' programs during midterms is to pan some artistic performances by the local musicians in the main hall. They start the show every day at six pm for an hour by playing pieces of music and song lyrics with heartwarming contents. She explained how profoundly they help students to stay calm, release their anxiety, and take a short break from their hectic schedule. As it is obvious, their output will be more remarkable as more peaceful as the students get. That is why even financial support is very crucial.
Second, it has an undeniable effect on their physical state. It is a proved fact that activities like working out will help our body to defense against disease by boosting our immune system. Besides, our brain releases Endorphin and Dopamine which are two hormones maintaining our mental and physical balance. As the colleges need a sound person to use their classes and libraries, they need to make sure to facilitate Gyms, swimming pools, tennis courts and make it affordable for students to use them.
Third, the students' emotional intelligence will accelerate by engaging in social activities in school. For instance, a timid person who is afraid of communication has to learn who to take time with his/her peers. There is no doubt that the school's environments are the most secured and supporting place for them to make a move and start getting touched by their surroundings. Therefore by the financial support for social activities, the universities or colleges will have robust students, not only in their lessons but also in their own life.
All in all, the reason as mentioned above, will soon convince everyone to take equal fundings for both classes and social activities in the consideration since it provides opportunities for the students to stay healthy, robust, and communicative.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, as to, for instance, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2353.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17142857143 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82555317677 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569230769231 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8352663405 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.65 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182630631085 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060879252077 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988906054487 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102598994973 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489907357956 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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