The swift development of technology has been bringing us many phenomena like the demand of immigration for having sophisticated life and better access to facilities, which are truly rational to be considered but at the same time, you would face with tones of unaccustomed events and fluctuations in that major city. But frankly, I must admit that I believe in high-speed growth and achievements after moving your native village or town. The following is the clarification of above statements.
First, the better access to vast varieties of facilities is really tantalizing and vigorously difficult to keep your desires away from them. I mean, just imagine a village with its fresh air, organic food, the sound of roosters before dawn,... minus the rapid unlimited internet connection! For me, it sounds like a disaster. This is the main source of interminable information which keeps your personal or business life moving forward. The whole modern world is depended on this technology and the evolution of individuals are relying on that. The internet is one of the most rudimentary necessities to achieve the success easier. And the fact is that there are many other examples of better conveniences which are not provided yet in small town and villages but the requirement of having them in our contemporary life is uncompromising.
Second, people would have more job opportunities, consequently, they attain more money which its huge impact on happiness is undeniable. For instance, I remember, two years ago my friend was really despondent about his financial situation since he was working as an Uber driver in Fullerton which is almost small and quiet city around L.A and he couldn't afford his life's expenses. fortunately, he moved to L.A and has had a great shift in his economical state. He has been able not only pay all of his debt but also altering his worn out car with brand new Hyundai and save for his dream vacation to Mexico with his girlfriend. I could see the sparkle of happiness in his eyes when I met him two weeks ago. As my friend's experience, I can advocate the concept of moving to have a happier life.
Finally, the advantages of moving from small towns or villages are making more sense so far for me and I believe that is the big jump into the interminable possibilities, happiness, and success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, frankly, if, really, second, so, for instance, i mean
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96683673469 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89111432042 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612244897959 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2109214226 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.529411765 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0588235294 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147715590328 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443171077058 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436378645021 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0932033782569 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265122087788 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 10.002688172 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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