Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The personal and work-related challenges that young people face today are not any different from the challenges their parents and grandparents faced when they were young.
Throughout history, adolescents have had difficulties in order to overcome different problems in puberty ages. The controversial question which arises here is whether the nature of problems faced by the youth has changed compared with previous generations or not. I am of the opinion that these challenges have been changed dramatically. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
First of all, the increase in the world population has introduced highly competitive demands for open jobs. Nowadays, the upgrade of public education-level, along with the increase in population-level, has given rise to immensely competing in the job atmosphere. These competitions, in turn, introduce lots of difficulties for the young who want to start their career. On the other hand, with the absence of a competitive job atmosphere, previous generations didn't confront these challenges. Take my brother's experience as an example. When my brother was fifteen, he decided to left school in order to get a full-time job. But, he failed to find any position without a diploma. By contrast, without attending school, my grandfather had been able to find an above-average job when he was sixteen. Had not the competing career environment exist, my brother would have found a job in the same way as my grandpa did.
Moreover, the development of science and technology has brought about numerous scientific fields, which has made the process of finding a prosperous career harder. Old generations mostly followed their ancestors' fields of work without any problem, but new generations are facing to the huge number of fields and branches which they can step into it. Thus, a sense of confusion is common in adolescents when they want to choose their way. For instance, when I completed high school, I faced with the dilemma of choosing my major in university. From one perspective, I could continue my father's way, and from another view, I could study my favorite major. Finally, After a lot of research and efforts, I opted for my field of interest. Not only did I come up with this hard decision, lots of my friends also did.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the nature of difficulties that adolescents faced with has been transformed. Appearing new problems related to the hiring process, coupled with the availability of vast numbers of working fields, are the reasons which strengthen my point of view. In the end, despite the fact that the youth are facing new challenges, it is highly suggested that they make use of their parents' experiences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: didn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, moreover, so, then, thus, for instance, in short, first of all, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13002364066 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01366611221 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565011820331 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5976776288 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.347826087 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3913043478 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.60869565217 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172823609785 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447313956219 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413931800353 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106042742033 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389668071285 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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