Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a wasted of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your idea
In this prosperous and sophisticated world, modern technology is one of the critical thing that affects everyone life. among this parents are very concern about the impact of digital devises and various softwares like computer games, which are born because of modern technology, on their children. When it comes to this point, people have some debates as to whether children should be allowed to play digital games or its better to spend their them on the other activities. personally, I agree with the first group and in what follows, two reasons will be discuse to shed light on this idea.
First reason coming to my mind to substantiate my stand point is that today children are overwhelmed with techologies and also they need hobeys to spend their spare time. Computer games without violence can be a perfect play for children to relax and they enjoy more with such a good games. These games can ride children from the hustle and bustle of thier schools and are good rest for children minds. My personal experience is a compeling example of this. When I was ten years old, I always played computer games after school. It had a great effect on me because my mind needed a deep relax that distract me from the school and from peoples. Therefor, I played and then my mind was open for homeworks.
Another Equally noteworthy point corroboraing my stance is that digital games can ignite childrens curiosity and children can learn a lot from these games if parents choos the games precicely. When childern play they attent whole of consentration on the game and the games have something for them to learn. For example, there is a game about mathematic and children have a good stugle with the mathematical aproaches whenm they play. Therefore if they play, they will learn more about various things without any forces and this kind of learning is very useful.
To sum up, based on all argumentations stated above, digital games are not wasted the chidren time because they need such a good hobbyes to relax and to be prepare for studing and some of the games contain educational subjects and children can learn a lot from them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, then, therefore, as to, for example, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82065217391 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46542729725 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529891304348 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4287835425 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.875 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26640534812 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952924149082 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586442527079 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165403815404 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228035693876 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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