Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The prosperity of societies is vital for all the people within it. Societies are established rules in order to control their individuals and enhance the quality of peoples' lives. While some people believe that the rules of society are not strict and bring enough freedom for young people, I subscribe to the opposite view. I will further substantiate my belief in the following paragraphs.

It is worth bearing in mind that strict rules hinder young people from following their passion and from germinating their ideas. In this line of thought, young people have a potential desire and will to enhance societies' quality since they have enough energy and big dreams about their lives. On the basis of this claim, establishing a business has so many steps to follow since strict rules make an establishing a business such a complex task that prevents young people from doing business; therefore their passion is ruined by these strict rules. To illustrate, take my own experience as an example. When I graduated from university, I had a great and unique idea about running an online Start-Up in my own country. Since rules of online business are so complicated and strict, my motivation after trying for two years vanished, and I abandoned my idea completely. This example clearly describes how stringent rules can be extremely destructive for society, especially for a young individual motivation. Of course, this is not the whole story.

Furthermore, young people are prevented from using their potential completely. No one can deny that individuals could excellently act if they are not besieged with harsh rules. In fact, Hijab, as a strict rule in my county for women, prevents them from wearing as they wish, which is forced women to wear black Chador to cover their bodies. In this circumstance, girls and women cannot perform their tasks appropriately, for example, an athletic woman who competes in an international competition cannot show her exact potential in comparison to her opponents, and therefore lose her position to a woman who has not forced to obey Hijab. It is obvious that if (should) rigid rules had not been regulated in my country, people, especially women, would have been able to flourish their talents and abilities.

To sum up, taking all the reasons and points mentioned above, I firmly believe that societies' rules for young people are strict. It is because strict rules prevent young people from showing their talents and following their ideas, and it diminishes the real potential of young people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 985, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...ive for society, especially for a young individuals motivation. Of course, this is not the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in fact, of course, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2127.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10071942446 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69269426333 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510791366906 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7115367545 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.947368421 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9473684211 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216221721132 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765045020176 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593303255652 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165121362776 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624552772147 0.0645574589148 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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