Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

No one can cast doubt on the importance of a society's role on its members lives. The controversial question which arises here is whether, nowadays, rules adjusted by societies for young people are too strict. I believe that the society should take easier in some of its rules for youngsters. To support this, there are several reasons two of which are going to be aptly exploerd in the following.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that, humans especially young people inherently tend to experience some activities. One practical procedure which helps them to answer their curiosity is to provide them with a good preserved environment in which they can experience some actions under the control of societies. Limiting them by setting strict rules makes them more eager to do that. For example, a couple of years ago, "white wensdays" campaign started by youngsters in my country, Iran, according to some restrictions of freedom for wemon, in which young girls decided to do not follow the strict rules of society, as a result, it brings about some conflict against society. Had the social rules were more flexible, they would not been in that difficultis caused by young people.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that should be taken into account is that, nowadays, due to the development of technology, young people have access to a lot of information by using internet. They can surf the net and learn about other society. Although some of them may nit be true, by camparing themselves with other societies, they may sense that they are under pressure of social rules. On the other hands, in past, due to the less access of people to information, they have accepted the laws easier. Needless to say, only with adopting rule to the contemorary situation and make them less rigid for young people, it is achievable to make youngsters to follow the rules.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the rules that societies expect young people to obey are too strict. The fact that providing them with some opportunities that let them to experience some activities under cotrol, coupled with their easier access to information which makes them aware from some others, is the reason which strengthens my claim.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 621, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r wemon, in which young girls decided to do not follow the strict rules of societ...
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Line 3, column 417, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...re of social rules. On the other hands, in past, due to the less access of people to in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, so, then, for example, in short, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01832460733 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70398067148 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523560209424 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6127889817 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.8125 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.875 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230225499098 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820599789091 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07100820756 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149584753454 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245247800399 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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