Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. use specific reasons and examples to support your idea.
Undoubtedly, the one of crucial elements of human life which help us having sophisticated and contemporary societies, is the willingness to obey rules. Some people believe that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are to strict, while others disagree. I agree with the latter group. The reasons of my opinion are explored in the following.
First and foremost, recent enhancements in technology has truly faciliated and easened human life. Nowadays, people do not have to work as hard as before and they are enjoying viriety of new technologies such as internet. These new advances let new generation to have better chance of being educated and vast options to decide for their future. Obviously, this well educated generation are greatly aware of their entitlements and can not be deprived of their rights.
What is more, it has been prooved that giving people, including young generation, more freedom than needed, will result in formation of inresponsibe personality in them. People need to learn participating in social and group activities. The more sophisticated these groups are, the more strict and rigorous rules they impose. So, if young people do not learn to obey specific rules, they can not contribute in group activities as well and they will grow inresponsible characteristics. As I remember, the most successful of my old friends are those who were the best at group avtivities.
To put it in a nutshell, I absolutely believe that the current rules which young people have to come along with are not too strict. Neither can well educated generation tolerate strict rules nor can they contribute in group activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to have' or 'have'.
Suggestion: to have; have
...al elements of human life which help us having sophisticated and contemporary societie...
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Line 5, column 192, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to participate'.
Suggestion: to participate
...rsonality in them. People need to learn participating in social and group activities. The mor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, well, while, such as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1403.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 272.0 407.700716846 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15808823529 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8847130756 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580882352941 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.246685162 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5333333333 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219546741484 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729745077561 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949989008533 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143145177998 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100676907591 0.0645574589148 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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