Do you agree or disagree with this statement? It is more important for governments to spend money to improve internet access than to improve public transportation. use specific reasons and examples to support your idea.
Undoubtedly, the main phenomenon of our century, is the astonishing breakthrough in telecommunication systems. Some people believe that, governments should allocate more budget to improve the internet access rather than public transportation, while others disagree. I am in agreement with former group. I will explore my reasons in the following.
First and foremost, in this contemporary society, many of tasks can be done through internet. By expanding internet access, many people would be able to do lots of their tasks by just staying at home and utilizing their computers or smartphones. consequently, a huge number of commutes inside the cities would be eliminated and the demand for public transportation would dramatically decrease. As I remember, a dozen years ago, people had to make to the banks for really primary tasks such as paying the gas bill of their house, depositing money or transferring it to other accounts, requesting for loans and etc. But now, all we need is our smartphone and internet access to carry out all the mentioned tasks.
what is more, allocating more budget to public transportation, would lead to absorb more and more population from smaller towns to the huge cities which is not recommended. Increasing population in huge cities such as Tehran, these days, is creating many problems. For instance, many people in Iran are inclined to immigrate to Tehran due to it's better infrastructures and educational, medical and transportation facilities. By spending more money on these facilities in huge cities, they would become more tempting as an immigration destination.
To put it in nutshell, I absolutely believe that enhancement of the internet access should take bigger portion in any budget rather than public transportation. By improving internet access, Not only are many of commutes along the cities deleted, but also immigration to huge cities are decreased.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, really, so, while, for instance, such as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35880398671 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18080938936 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58803986711 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1859677823 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.533333333 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0666666667 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239266776806 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724410748855 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590139302945 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148195067307 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387205866477 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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