Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Considering the argument that young people in all societies have to follow and obey the strict rules, I am strongly inclined to take the opposite direction of this statement regarding the crucial aspects of the rule for bringing about the desirable conditions for all people life. To elaborate more on the topic mentioned the following reasons and examples will be presented.
First and foremost, the societies' rule can be implied as the perfect tools to control the crime incidence of the violent behaviors from some young people. As the current psychological and anthropology finding reveal, because of high level of excitement in the young people, their potential to bring about the violent behavior is much more than other people. The deficiency of rule in the society can stimulate them to show these dangerous conducts in the public. For instance, in the country that carrying the gun has no restriction, the high possibility of shooting is exist compared with the country with regulating rule for this subject. It is obvious that there is a causal relationship between the presence of the rule in the society on the one hand and the high desirable security on the other hand. Thus, the presence of rules cannot be denoted as strict tools for young people when it comes to people security.
Another primary reason can be attributed to the misconception of rule definition as the restriction. As the excavated historical clays disclose, the rules for establishing a society have originated from the early civilizations. For instance, there is clay from Iraq region which had noted on it that "if the son attacks his father, his hands will be cut". In the first observation, it can be implied as a strict rule but pondering the importance of family role in society stability, it can be justified via moral subjects. It is also worth noting that, as far as I concerned, I have not seen as private rules can devoted for the young people. In other words, the society rules at least in my country do not depend on the people age.
Taking all of these perspectives into account, I cannot disagree more about the statement that the society's rules are too harsh for young people considering the necessity of people security and misconception of rule definition as the restriction. To my best knowledge, the role social advisers to educate people about the importance of the rules is critical.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, so, thus, at least, for instance, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9776674938 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79396092237 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481389578164 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.6305358448 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.375 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1875 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248488096028 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869112049412 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558469902165 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172000043996 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493765494735 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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