Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Regarding weather young people nowadays are restrained by more social orders, answers can vary considerably from individual to individual. Some people believe the young people were expected more by society, making them fail to be themselves, while others argues that it is more diverse and inclusive in current society. As far as I am concerned, my experience leads me to conclude that the former statement is more reasonable, and I will explain why I stand the viewpoint in the following essay.
To begin with, I believe the society become more and more liberal, indicating that people are more allowed to express themselves. Take the gender issue for example: when my mom was young, the girls were expected to get married soon as long as they turned into adult. Consequently, my grandfather refused to let her enter to the college, just because she was a girl. Although she wanted to obtain higher education, she soon got married with my father after graduating from high school. Conversely, the girls are not be forced to marry someone when they become adults. In my college, the number of female students even higher than male. Even though there are still some discrimination and stereotype toward the woman, they have more opportunities to explore their lives and achieve their dreams currently.
Furthermore, the society also become more inclusive to different kinds of people. In the past, if you did not fulfill some social expectation, you might be punished by the power of authority. For instance, the homosexual was determined as mental disease and illegal behavior in the past. Under the circumstance, they had no choice but pretend to be heterosexual, or they would be depressed by the society. Being caught, they might be put in to prison and be asked to take the treatments. In contrast, my country, Taiwan, have passed the law of same-sex marriage for few years, admitting the marriage between two men or two women. Currently, to punish someone because of the sexual orientation and to cure the homosexual by the treatments are determined to be illegal, and the young gay and lesbian will not be forced to conceal themselves in today society.
In a nutshell, I firmly believe that young people today are less confined by social order. I realize that there are still numerous absurd rules that expect young people to obey. Nevertheless, I believe I have substantiated reasons to support my point of view
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, furthermore, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76104513868 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554455445545 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9494810712 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144424751141 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444060367498 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503492423505 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106064146752 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682130445457 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, furthermore, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76104513868 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554455445545 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9494810712 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144424751141 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444060367498 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503492423505 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106064146752 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682130445457 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.