Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, there is a trend that the rules made by the society which are expected to be followed by young people are becoming stricter, thus resulting in a drastic debate on whether such rules are too strict. From my perspective, if the society can put them into use in proper circumstances, these regulations are suitable as regards the growth of adolescents as well as the development of society as a whole.
Admittedly, undue restrictions within the context of education will bring unexpected negative effects. We have already entered an era of innovation and interdisciplinary approaches are becoming more and more important. If the students are restricted excessively in the campus situation, they will behave and cause less trouble for certain but will gradually lose the ability of creative and critical thinking simultaneously, which is the loss of the society since these students are necessary components of creative communities. Imagine how frightening it is if all students just simply approve of what their professors assert and what is written in their textbooks, which will greatly reduce the possibilities of the STEM subjects eventually. Given that it is so important to protect the students from losing their creativity, the restrictions in the educational institutions should be carefully designed.
However, the ultimate meaning of the society's cultivation of young people ought not to be overlooked, to prepare them to adapt to this highly complex system of careers to be exact. Years of training can certainly make young people well-rounded and have a deeper understanding of a vast variety of concepts. Nevertheless, whether they are equipped with the mindset in which making contributions to society is the primary concern needs to be discussed. If I were the president of the education department, stricter rules should be enforced since they are the key to a stable society. Only when we ensure young people are restricted by regulations in their daily lives can we safely assert that society can function well. Otherwise, adolescents may organize protests against the government, causing chaos to society because a regular pattern of production will be influenced deeply. Thus, for the sake of a harmonious society, stricter rules should be made to restrict the behaviors of the young.
To sum up, it is wise to make stricter rules for the young to follow as long as they are enforced in the right situations and are seriously designed.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, thus, well, as regards, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24747474747 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05429893185 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540404040404 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.5777729906 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.533333333 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154710959161 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536672483994 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063488115322 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114630313435 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0781187818525 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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