Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A great deal of attention has been attracted to the laws which has been adopted for youngsters to obey coping with the fact that they are more stricter that they did before. I, for one, subscribe to the idea that today's juvenile are under rigorous rules from their society than any time before. To advocate this viewpoint, two reasons are elaborated in what follows.
To begin with, under no circumstance can a typical teenager become successful in his own life unless he/she is restricted by reasonable rules. In other words, the more prosperous juvenile a society has, the greater likelihood of being a modern and thriving country will be. Therefore, governments try to improve young people's lives by adopting different laws in order to guarantee the future of their country. What happened to Iran in the last 40 years illustrates this point clearly. Having firm rules mainly based on religion, the teenagers of 20 years ago have limited amount of time to spend on harmful activities such as parties, drugs and so on, subsequently, they were always with their parents and do different kind of sports. As a result, right now they have more healthy lifestyle and more successful personal life which contributes to the prosperity of our society in this modern era.
Secondly, it is crystal clear that having more entertaining activities and hobbies, today's teenagers have stronger tendency to deny their responsibilities and pay more attention to their leisure times. In comparison with past societies that children and teenagers were supposed to help their parents in their work, today's teenager have more free time to spend, thus, countries have adopted more rules to limit the teenager's activity in order to help them to come in the correct line. For example, comparing my life with my fathers, I realized that my father was working from the lower ages of 10 in my grandfather's land. However, I had significant free time during my school, so I started to go out with my friends and be in numerous clubs and parties. Consequently, the need for having strict rule such as forbidding alcoholic drink for teenagers would be more monumental that any time before. In this way, the more comfort and free time of current young people results to the necessity of having stricter rules.
In sum, above from aforementioned explanation, I do believe that in our contemporary world, more rules have been enacted for teenagers. This is because not only do countries want to be sure about the success of future by having cultivated people but also governments want to limit the times which is spent on entertainment by teenagers which was not exist in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stricter' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stricter
...obey coping with the fact that they are more stricter that they did before. I, for one, subsc...
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Line 5, column 884, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to the prosperity of our society in this modern era. Secondly, it is cry...
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Line 11, column 206, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: comparison,
...re attention to their leisure times. In comparison with past societies that children and t...
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Line 11, column 415, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teenagers'' or 'teenager's'?
Suggestion: teenagers'; teenager's
...es have adopted more rules to limit the teenagers activity in order to help them to come ...
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Line 17, column 351, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...ntertainment by teenagers which was not exist in the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as for, for example, kind of, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2224.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9865470852 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70772937109 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531390134529 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.335091202 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.823529412 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2352941176 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.29411764706 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106820931413 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.039277452569 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0192626157315 0.0737576698707 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0744274050806 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0115836726677 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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