Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
It goes without saying that criteria in the enactment of laws by the responsible organizations and governments have been remarkably changed over the past centuries. While many parochial people overlooking the tangible evidence, which are no secret to anyone may not concede, I strongly take issue with the idea that the rules which the contemporary youth are supposed to follow are so rigid. The following paragraphs will be illustrated to substantiate the viewpoint I asserted.
First and foremost, now that the governments and organizations conceive that unless they allow the adolescents and youth to select the route of their life openly freely and collaborate in the activities voluntarily, their ingenuity, merits and indigenous capabilities will not flourish. In fact, governments invest a lot of money in discerning the intelligence of the youth and help them find a profession which utterly accommodates his preoccupation and motivations. By contrast, the past youth were obliged to meticulously obey the preordained regulations and they were not entitled to choose either their favorite occupation or even their desired spouse and it was mandatory for them to pursue the livelihood which either the society or the family imposed on them. But then again, in the status quo, the ultimate target of a great number of researches and organizations has defined the implications of the legislated laws for the youth. In other words, assessing a great deal of information which is elicited from demographical data, surveys and exact statistics, they recommend the responsible institutes whether passed laws interfere with the rights of youth and may have the detrimental aftereffects for them. If so, they will be unavoidably obliged to revise them.
Second, considering the outstanding boons of the ongoing rules, in the long run, whoever has knowledge and awareness would apprehend that the passed rules not only are not so tough for the youth, but they conspicuously help them promote their momentous capabilities which are contemplated the prerequisites of their future life. Actually, obeying these beneficial laws which at first may seem to be so difficult to be tracked by the young people make them more well-organized individuals who are able to cope with a diverse spectrum of tasks simultaneously and boost their efficiency. Furthermore, not until they obey these utilitarian regulations which consist a lot of facets to facilitate achieving the route of victory, can they be autonomous persons whose ability to handling the priorities and arduous duties without the assistance of anyone is exalted by everyone. In addition, although the current laws may seem to be strict, obeying them stage by stage, young people are able to abandon such inauspicious habits like procrastinating the considered activities both in their private life and their job milieu and help them perform their activities exactly on its considered time.
In conclusion, taking all of the aforementioned grounds and explanations into account, I strongly believe that contemporary laws are not so strict to obey since several responsible organizations evaluate them from the heterogeneous perspectives and they can help youth amend their productivity and substantial sufficiencies.
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...onsidered time. In conclusion, taking all of the aforementioned grounds and explanations...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, second, so, then, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2769.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47233201581 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17946848158 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53162055336 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 872.1 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 20.1344086022 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.8666721441 48.9658058833 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 197.785714286 100.406767564 197% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.1428571429 20.6045352989 175% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0978710483626 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364163836695 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392459153559 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0690487779455 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394474659188 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.4 11.7677419355 190% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.48 58.1214874552 46% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 10.1575268817 182% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.04 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.01818996416 125% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 86.8835125448 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.0537634409 163% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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