Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
rules are a vital part of our society. During living humans on Earth there are always different laws in order to manage communities in various circumstance. some people believe that nowadays all citizens anticipate that all youth should obey and conform rules that are too strict, while others hold an opposite view. In my opinion, today laws are not strict enough that young individuals should follow for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that every year a lot of youth become addict to drug that show the rules are not strict. As over time, by advancing transport, unfortunately, all young people are subject to harmful material such as heroin. if there are excellent constitution in society, youth never have bold to use these drugs that really have catastrophic effect. For instance, when I was in dormitory, all students were health at first. As over time, they noticed that there are tons of source of drug in city. when they were under pressure, they bought addict without any limitation rules. unfortunately, after two semester the majority of them were fired from university. if there had been drastic law in order to prevent them, now all of them would become good person that is benefit for society.
Another reason is that the number of imprisons are in jail are young people because of lack of strict laws. By decreasing asset rules, most of youth tend to steal so as to acquire required money. In other words, people in the past had to work only to obtain everything that they wanted, while now young people prefer to steal due to the fact there is not any rules that punish them. For example, now researcher contrast two period of time in order to determine whether now rules are enough to keep up youth from breaking laws. they noticed that, as over time, young people incline to steal as opposed to some rules.
In conclusion, I do not believe that there are too strict rules for young people. Not only do the majority of them become addict to drug, but also many of them now are in jail. Government should create more strict rule in order to prevent youth to make a serious mistake.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74594594595 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3607702003 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521621621622 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6134941397 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8709677419 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172383464629 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547132973564 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587803406883 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118473808654 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423139121997 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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