Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
As a student for the last 16 years of my life, if there is anything I can say for sure, it's that the environment of our school life truly shapes us as an individual and helps to determine the person we become eventually. Teachers and friends are two such fundamental components in forming the shape of our character. Now, if I were asked to choose the person who had the most influence on me, I would definitely point to the latter group. Not only were they important for me, but they had also influenced me in most of my decisions directly or indirectly. Due to similarities that come with a common age group, a sense of competetion among each other and the extent of empathy shared within the friends, I have been highly affected by them.
Since people identify closest with the ones they can relate with, who else can one feel connected to one another better than the people of same generation? Being in a same age group, it is easier to feel peer pressure than any other forms of persuasion. There is one particular incident that happened to me in sixth grade. The teahcer in our class had announced the optional field trip the following week but she was strongly encouraging everyone to join. Nevertheless, I had decided to bail out in the hopes that I could stay home and watch TV whole day. However, when I learnt all my friends were going, I had this intense desire to join as well. As I finally ended up going, I realized difference beetween the impact of my teacher and my friends in me. Definitely, it was my peer circle who had me make that decision.
Now, what follows the peer pressure next is sense of competition. Looking around the classmates can highly affect one's performance. I for one, have my own little experience back when I was in Eigth grade. As an average student, I was friends with people of similar intellect level. However, this one time, a very close friend of mine went ahead to become a class topper. After this event, I realized that I could excel if I worked hard as well. And not surprsingly, I was replacing my friend from the next test after that. Irrespective of the countless counselling my class teacher used to give me, it was only when I felt the sense of competetion from my friend, did I feel influenced to work hard. This shows how competition can persuade a person.
Notwithstanding the negative forces that come with friends, it is important to address the blessings that come with it in the form of being able to share feelings and all sorts of problems. Not that there aren't teachers who don't want to ,listen to any problems but it is still that friends we go to everytime we struggle with something. There are countless times I have found it easier to complain with my friends and follow their advice than that of teachers.
To sum up, the irresistible pressure from peer circle, the sense of competition they can ignite as well as the empathy one shares with another, are the reasons what draw us towards the friends despite our teachers being important role models in our school life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, well, i feel, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2503.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 547.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57586837294 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58863575314 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499085923218 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 779.4 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7326768437 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2692307692 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0384615385 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.80769230769 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103073243178 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0272560277335 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0287455182309 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0646218815449 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271780563352 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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