Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Educational system is a crucial part of student’s training with a strong effect on their future. School is an undeniable part of this system where children spend most of their life's time and interact with other kids and various teachers who would shape student's behavior and charactristics. Some people believe that teachers have greater impressions on students than their friends, whereas some others take an opposite attitude toward this idea. In my view, teachers can exert more influence on students for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that students consider their teachers as a role model so they are influenced by them readily. Children are in a specific period of their lives when they present more curiosity to learn different things. They like to admire adult people who succeed in carrying out special performances, so every child tends to pick its own hero from those people. Occasionally, kids try to imitate their role model’s behavior and do as well as them in confronting diverse subjects. Thus, in educational world students mostly choose their teachers as their champion who create a radical impact on pupils. For example, when I was in elementry school, I was too shy and couldn't communicate with other students which cause several social and educational problems for me. The only person trying to enter my world and helping me to improve myself was undoubtedly my teacher. Because of her assistance, I shared many of my secrets with her and she became my all-time hero. This strong feeling between us cause me to focus on even her minor charactristics in order to progress and made her happy. My teacher used her profound influence not only to increase my confidence, but also to improve my educational level which I could never get from any of my close friends. This fundamentally helped me in becoming a successful lawyer at the moment. This experience taught me that though no one can deny the fact that friends are influential in some specific perspectives, their impact is not the same as students’ teachers.
Also, teachers have a greater influence by suggesting more thoughtful and valuable opinions to younger adults than their friends. Psychologically children seek for new experiences in their lives to form their identity which determines their character. Generally, teachers are the most common persons who share a lot of information with kids. For instance, statistics demonstrated that students accept beliefs easier from their teachers than their friends. Researchers investigated two groups of students separately. One group spent most of its time with their teacher and another group with their friends, while scientists control the reactions in students’ minds in order to unveil the efficiency in learning a unique behavior. Surprisingly, students’ brain functions showed a dramaticlly high performance in absorbing new information due to the fact that teachers provide better infrastructure for learning a new knowledge. So kids could be influenced faster in an environment with more constructive ideas, while they inclined to waste their time instead of learning when they are around their friends. If students had not included with their teachers, they wouldn't be impressed a lot.
In conclusion, teachers would have a stronger effect in changing students than their friends. Not only are they a good model role for students, but they also could impact on student's mind and shape their beliefs. I think parents should pay more attention in choosing their children’s teachers because their kids are affected by them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, well, whereas, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as well as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3046.0 1977.66487455 154% => OK
No of words: 574.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30662020906 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92822059182 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51393728223 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 900.0 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7442076386 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.785714286 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53571428571 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358610724439 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114801978267 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748948926727 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255407911216 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514182448879 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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