Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When we talk about figures that have a significant influence on students’ thoughts, there are two that excel, professors and friends. Which one is more influential, though, is a matter of intense debate. As far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that, between those two, friends have more influence on students than teachers. This idea is based on two main reasons that will be analyzed thoroughly below.
Friends have communication codes that allow them to convey ideas that professor do not master. The way in which adolescences communicate each other today is quite different from the traditional one. An illustrative example of that was a situation I experienced with one students in my electronics class. At the end of a class about Kirchhoff’s laws I left them a homework assignment, which would be discussed in the next class. Then, the next day one of my student solve the exercise and the explanation that he gave was completely wrong. Although I repeated several time the correct explanation, he continued supporting the same erroneous idea, alleging that a friend showed him a different demonstration for that phenomenon. He even showed the class YouTube videos and articles in his social networks that taught the same crazy theory. It cost me many hours and a giant effort to convince him that all those explanations were inaccurate, only because he was no willing to believe that his friend’s ideas were incorrect.
Secondly, friend spend the major part of the time together, and have the same interests. When two people spend a lot of time doing what they love, the ties between them strengthen over time. As a result, the students feel more comfortable talking with a friend than with a professor. For instance, my son have a friend which come to play with him all afternoon after the school. Between them, they are quite talkative and extroverted, whereas in the school the professor claims that they have difficulties communicating with them, because they are fairly timid.
In summation, I am of the opinion due to the codes of communication that teenagers use to communicate each others, and the time that they spend doing activities that they like, creating unbreakable bonds in the process.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: one student; a student; students
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'several times'.
Suggestion: several times
...s completely wrong. Although I repeated several time the correct explanation, he continued s...
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...e codes of communication that teenagers use to communicate each others, and the tim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1868.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06233062331 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94146696009 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558265582656 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.937968595 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.777777778 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118336011131 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413668019531 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463764492426 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752666623961 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359483550486 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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