Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Educational system is a crucial part of student’s training with a strong effect on their future. School is where children spend most of their life's time and interact with other kids and various teachers who would shape student's behavior and charactristics. Some people believe that teachers have great impression on students than their friends, whereas others take an opposite attitude toward this idea. In my view, teachers can exert more influence on students for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that students consider their teachers as a role model so they are influenced by them readily. Children are in age that are so talented and curios to learn different things, so every child tend to have their own hero who is the best in each aspect for her. All the time, kids try to imitate their model behavior and do as same as them in confronting diverse subjects. Thus, in educational world students get their teachers as their champion who create a radical impact on pupils. For example, when I was in elementry schools, I was too shy and couldn't communicate with other students which cause several social and educational problems for me. The only person trying to enter my world and helping me to improve myself was undoubtedly my teacher. Because of her assistance, she became my hero and this strong feeling between us cause me to focus on even her minor charactristics in order to progress and made her happy. My teacher used her profound influence not only to increase my confidence, but also to improve my educational level which would make me a successful lawyer at the moment. This experience taught me that though no one can deny the fact that friends are influential in some specific perspectives, their impact is not the same as students’ teachers.
Also, it has psychologically been proved that teachers have drastic impact on student's mind than their friends because they provide more valuable opinions. People are seeking for new experiences to form their mind and thoughts which control their features, therefore who has the most effect on their mind would change them more than others. For instance, statistics demonstrated that students accept beliefs easier from their teachers than their friends. Researchers investigated two groups of students, one who spent time with their teacher and another with their friends, while controlling students mind reaction in order to determine the efficiency of learning the same behavior. Surprisingly, student's brain function illustrated a dramaticlly high performance in absorbing new information due to the fact that teacher’s knowledge is vaster than student’s friends, so pupils could influence faster in environment with more new and attractive data, while they inclined to waste their time instead of learning with their friends. If students had not included with their teachers, they wouldn't be impressed a lot.
In conclusion, teachers would have a stronger effect in changing students than their friends. Not only are they a good model role for students, but they also could impact on student's mind and shape their beliefs. I think parents should pay more attention in choosing their children’s teachers because their kids are affected by them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2746.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 524.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24045801527 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81291495265 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50572519084 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 802.8 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.887973207 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.818181818 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8181818182 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.370231137997 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135927049592 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714266828811 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26347347212 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616529163736 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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