Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For students who are planning to work in business, learning about psychology is more important than learning about technology. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern 21st century soft skills, such as understanding other people's desires, are much more crucial than hard ones, such as knowing how a certain device works. Personally, I believe that nowadays the learning process should be organized around psychology discipline, especially for students who plan to link their careers with business. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, the more you understand people in your team the better results you can achieve. And to do so you have to comprehend what motivates people. And only the psychology classes or courses could provide this information to you. My experience is a compelling illustration of this. Two years ago I, as a manager in a major Russian oil and gas company, was assigned a complex project that had to be done in a short period. It was my first experience of managing more than twenty team members. Unfortunately, I made mistake and focused on the technical part of the project, as I knew how to deal with it, rather than led the team. It was not a surprise for me that I did not manage to meet the deadline. My supervisor assessed my job and provided me with clear feedback that I had to boost my soft skills. To do so I participated in a special program that was about psychological issues of managing teams and people. As a result, my next project was finished within the time, moreover, I was nominated for the best project manager award. I definitely think that if I had psychology classes when I was at university, I would have not made such mistakes.
Secondly, in contrast with the technological aspects of the things that change every 5-10 years, the psychological ones stay constant for centuries. That is why students should dedicate time to the latter, and this knowledge could be used for a whole life. I remember that at university I spent two semesters going deeper into the subject of using laser technology to store and write data to CD-disks. Does anyone in 2020 using such devices? Obviously no. On the other hand, I still use tips provided by psychology professor about how to work with stress.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that psychology should be the main focus for students who want to get good results in business. This is because it will allow them to make the most of the employees, and, moreover, this knowledge will not be obsolete.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75837320574 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74439454639 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562200956938 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0949723194 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4090909091 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232684692212 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601053496339 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0512962186599 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131787825185 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465845328162 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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