Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not.
Successful is a goal that all people love it. Being success have the many aspect. If a person wants to be success, he or she must will do many things. Many of people believe that to be success don’t have any requirement, but in my opinion being success need a special treatment such as neat and organized at work and students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not. In the next paragraphs I will explain some reasons for my claim.
At first, Students with neat rooms and more organized their around have better focus in their lesson. When the room’s students are not neat and don’t have any organized this disturb their focus and their make more challenges in their thinks. This situation has the bad effect on the students score, finally. For example, when I was a college student, I have a roommate that he was a very discipline person who had a good program for all his time. He got up at morning and doing exercise and starting to study with great focus, he concluded his lesson with high point and became the best student at the college. He was so organized student in his time. Therefore, being success need the organization and neat.
The second exquisite reason that I must mention, it is saving students’ time. When a student has a neat room and organization he/she don’t spend their time to search and find instrument like pens and books. Imagine A student with a dirty room and without any organized program when he/she want to study he/she don’t know begin which lesson or don’t correct image of her/his need and don’t have enough time to study. Hence, he/she waste many times and don’t receive success at the end. The last research of Student Research and Technology Institute at the London College showed that more than 75 percent of student with neat room and better organized time have a higher rate of success on entrance college exams. This is the authentic reason to understand the organization and being neat importance.
In short, with the above reasons we known the key role of neat room and organization to the students’ success. Although, some people don’t believe to these features, in my viewpoint, neat room and organization have the great role in the student success without doubt.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun aspect seems to be countable; consider using: 'many aspects'.
Suggestion: many aspects
... people love it. Being success have the many aspect. If a person wants to be success, he o...
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Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...thout any organized program when he/she want to study he/she don't know begin ...
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Line 7, column 37, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'knew'?
Suggestion: knew
... In short, with the above reasons we known the key role of neat room and organizat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, second, so, then, therefore, for example, in short, such as, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77126324986 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4825 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.429748589 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.684210526 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0526315789 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368048253544 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131495527716 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111271040797 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256293532876 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806270758117 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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