Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays many scientists believe that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict, on the other hand the other scientists are disagreed. I am disagreed with this claim too. I will elaborate my reasons in the next paragraphs.
The first exquisite reasons that I must mention is over development of virtual spaces. Virtual spaces is a public and unlimited spaces in the hand of people too younger of them. The Virtual spaces like internet and social networks Not only are free spaces, but also don't have no restriction hence, It could be dangerous for teenagers that don't have many familiarities to this spaces. My own experiences could be a suitable example, when I was an middle student I work with internet web sites one days I was online in a chat group a tricky hacker could hack our family PC and remove all parent data unfortunately. After this event I understand that my mother advises that banned me to use of PC was greatly true.
The second plausible reasons that make me agree with restriction of younger treatment is control of younger treatment. It is an acceptable idea that a group of children and teenager must instruct whit social values. If a society don’t have any moral framework their people behavior would become uncontrollable vigorously. Recent study of London Social Study Institute depicted that in the EU countries with less restriction in their middle schools the number of young prisoners is approximately about 26 percent higher than countries with higher restriction. Norway is a country with A high level of discipline rules, in this country we have seen a few young prisoners from 1970s to now.
In short, Although, many researcher and scientists believed that expectation of young people to be obey is too restrict in my view following and obedience among young people is a necessary rule because virtual spaces developed without any restriction and social framework and role to be learnt since younger age period.
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... to be learnt since younger age period.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, in short, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1662.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97604790419 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73764701458 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565868263473 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.6254744637 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.714285714 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224639774876 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737417112219 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780201426433 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162330373896 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107803750679 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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