Students of a university have a long break between university semesters; the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
1. Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study (For example, a student majoring in engineering may take course in fine arts or social science.)
2. Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town. (For example, students may help local primary school children with their homework.) Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why? Give detailed examples and reasons. Use your OWN words, do NOT use memorized examples.
Free times between university’s semester is a big opportunities for student, this time has undeniable role in students’ life becuase, they could use thier time in various field such as new courses, sports, trip, etc., some people beleive students must work in the university’s city or their hometown to improve some aspect of life’s the city or their own town and other tell: the student must take a course on subject that has no direct connection to their of major study, in my opinion student must take a course that has no relation to their major study for two reason that I explain in next paragraphs.
At first, it helps to students to learning more and improving their skills, students in university study in own field only, they get skills in one field and they are neglected of other skills and science topics. Therefore with attend in new courses that has no direct relationship with their major study they could achive more things that they need to imporve themselves. For example, when I was student in the art college, between two semester I was going to English classes, it was very vital for me in my student’s course owing to, it promote my english level and give me wide range of abilities to read and interpert of english article. Hence, experience of using free time between two semester can be successful.
Second, students need other courses to making rest and experien diversity topics. When students take unrelated course comparison to the major course it make variety condition for students that make rest and be away from their major study that they had many challenge with it during the semester. The Statistics Center of London Universites published a paper recently, that it is depicted that more than half students who between two simester universities attend to unrelated classes (such as music, art, painting, graphics, programming, etc) in comparison to their major study acquired better point in their exams on next semester in contrast with other students that they were going the classes that were connect to the major study directly. With this explanation, if students go to the unrelated classes in leisure time between two semester, not only they make rest, but also their GPA impove in next simester, this not excellent?!
In short, all the forementioned resons lead us to the conclusion, that even thought some academicans believe that many student must go to their university in leisure time between two semester and improve their university, in my opinion students must attend in various and unrelated classes in contrast with the major study’s to get more skills and improve other abilities in addition, they must make rest and don’t challenge with their major study in leisure time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'opportunity'?
Suggestion: opportunity
...een university's semester is a big opportunities for student, this time has undeniable ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ed of other skills and science topics. Therefore with attend in new courses that has no ...
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Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'semester' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'semesters'.
Suggestion: semesters
...student in the art college, between two semester I was going to English classes, it was...
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Line 3, column 549, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'promotes'?
Suggestion: promotes
...n my student's course owing to, it promote my english level and give me wide rang...
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Line 3, column 703, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'semester' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'semesters'.
Suggestion: semesters
...erience of using free time between two semester can be successful. Second, students ...
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Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...ourse comparison to the major course it make variety condition for students that ma...
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Line 5, column 255, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun challenge seems to be countable; consider using: 'many challenges'.
Suggestion: many challenges
...ay from their major study that they had many challenge with it during the semester. The Stati...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Statistics Center of London Universites published a paper recently, that it is ...
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Line 5, column 713, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'connected'.
Suggestion: connected
...t they were going the classes that were connect to the major study directly. With this...
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Line 5, column 842, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'semester' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'semesters'.
Suggestion: semesters
...ted classes in leisure time between two semester, not only they make rest, but also the...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun student seems to be countable; consider using: 'many students'.
Suggestion: many students
... thought some academicans believe that many student must go to their university in leisure ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, for example, in addition, in contrast, in short, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 459.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23747276688 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89861400631 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485838779956 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.6003584229 39% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 57.0 20.1344086022 283% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 199.891064082 48.9658058833 408% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 300.5 100.406767564 299% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 57.375 20.6045352989 278% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.375 5.45110844103 282% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272435479487 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139613195914 0.076458572812 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653869838932 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196751269214 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529321172405 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.9 11.7677419355 271% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 13.62 58.1214874552 23% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.5 10.1575268817 251% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.0 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 10.002688172 560% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.8 10.0537634409 247% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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