Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Telephone has greater influence on people’s lives than
television has.
In fact, telephone is an inseparable part of people’s lives nowadays. While, some people believe that television have a great role in people’s lives, in my opinion, phone and smartphone influnce all aspect people’s lives and it is more important than television. The importance of the phones become more than past. We see the using of phones have become more and more. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
The first exquisite reason that I must mention is the role of social networks. In the last year progress in the social networks and their applications spread all over the world and world’s people create accounts and becoming a user of the social networks. Social networks like Facebook, Instagram, Telegram, Whatsapp, etc. give people various opportunities such as amusement, chat, share documents, make the relationship. These features make the smartphone very attractive and influence people’s lives. To indicate the power of this importance, I have a real example, one of my friends with his Instagram account makes a relationship with a girl and they have fall love and married finally, This is an undeniable role of phones.
The second reason that I won't explain, is the availability of the phone. Nowadays smartphones are producing in small sizes and everybody could carry them and using at any place such as tran, park, conference or party. If you see the people at the every place, you will see they have a smartphone on their hands. This is not true?! However, the smartphones don’t have positive effect always, It may be an addictive influence. The last report of the International Technology Center at Berlin University indicates that not only smartphone not a positive influence on children but also, it makes a negative effect on their brains. This center has emphasized that the smartphone's bad effect related to its availability.
In conclusion, although, both television and phone have undeniable influence on people’s lives, in my viewpoint, the phone has a greater influence on people’s lives nowadays. Smartphones with attractive opportunities like social networks and availability and small size have become the inseparable parts of people’s lives.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50700280112 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2483554119 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543417366947 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9281243441 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.473684211 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7894736842 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198055005198 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621339122288 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762403960793 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138473774395 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664686749437 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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