Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Telephone has greater influence on people’s lives than
television has.
In fact, telephone is a inseparable part of people’s lives nowdays. While, some people believe that television have a great role in people’s lives, in my opinion, phone and smartphone influnce all aspect people’s lives and it is more important than television. The importance of the phones become more than past. We see the using of phones have became more and more. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
The first exquisite reason that I must mention is role of social networks. In the last year progress in the social networks and their applications spread all over the world and world’s people create accounts and became a user of the social networks. Social networks like Facebook, Instagram, Telegram, what’sapp etc. give people the various opportunity such as amusment, chat, share documents, make relationship. This features make smartphone very atrractive and influance people’s lives. To indicate the power of this importance, I have a real example, one of my friend with his Instagram’s account make a relationship with a girl and they have fall a love and married finally, This is a undeniable role of phones.
The second resons that I want explain, is the availibelity of the phone. Nowadays smartphones is producing in small sizes and every body could carry it and using at the any palce such tran, park, conference or party. If you see the people at the every place, you will seen they have a smartphone on their hands. This is not true?! However, the smarthone don’t have positive effect always, It may be a addictive influences. The last report of the International Technology Centere at Berlin University indicate that, not only smartphone not positive influnce on children but also, it make a negative effect on their brains. This center has emphasisd that smartphon’s bad effect related to its availibility.
In the conclusion, althought, both television and phone have undeniable influance on people’s lives, in my viewpoint, the phone has a grater influnce on the people’s lives nowadays. Smartphone with attractive opportunities like social networks and availability and small size have become the inseparable parts of the people’s lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, in fact, such as, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48882681564 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3621226154 2.67179642975 126% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54748603352 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9875802694 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.421052632 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8421052632 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177908346158 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597245398409 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644200275587 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122583695381 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407919922868 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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