Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
subject such as art, music, drama should be a part of every child's basic education
Nowadays, demand of education is gradualy inctreasing in this physical world. All the parents are enrolling thier students in to the school at the age of 6 to 7. School is teaching some science, maths and language class all the time. I am in the opinion that, school should involve the classes of the art, music and drama in the student's basic education. I have a two reasons for the, which i will explain in following essay.
First of all, it will give time to studets to refresh them from the today's hectic schedule of the school. Research showing that grasping power of the students is increased due to getting some rest after the regular classes. To illustrate that, my own example is enough. I had taken admission in to the music classes in my school days. I learn how to play piano in this class. It will completely refreshing my mind because of that i will more accurately attending rest of my clases. It will resulted in to my grade sheet, where i am able to score high marks than my previous year.
Secondlly, extra curriculumn classes may developed passion toward this field in the students. Unknowingly, this type of passion is sometime turn in to the full time proffesion and by this skill they can able to make money in their younger age. For example, My cousins is getting admission in one international school, where this school is already rolling down the drama classes. My Cousins is enrolling in that course when he was only in 5th grade. Now, he is very passionate about the drama. He is working hard in the drama. On this date, he is advertising for the many domestic and national company and he is making more money than he is paying in his school as a fees.
To conclude, I am in the opinion that school should start the extra curriculumn activity in the basic education. Because it will give time to students for refreash from this hectic schedule and because it will developed some skill in the students.
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...his hectic schedule and because it will developed some skill in the students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, may, second, so, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60693641618 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50604534871 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505780346821 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6006042441 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.9047619048 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4761904762 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0662588443799 0.236089414692 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0253170205927 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443933660815 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0502274192117 0.150856017488 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416095421913 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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