Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important that studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this sophisticated world where the realms of technology and social science are expanding dramatically, people have always been concerned about their succession and their future job. In this regard, there has always been a contentious among human beings that what influences or guarantees their success in their future occupation. Thus, some people might think that relating to others well have a decisive effect on people's succession in their future job more than studying hard during the school time, and others hold the viewpoint that the deciding factor in this manner is studying hard during the school. This essay's author endorses the former notion due to two main reasons which will be demonstrated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, people who have strong skills in relating to others very well, would be able to achieve their desired goal during their working time, especially in communicative projects, resulting in their success. In other words, in today's world, the more workforce is able to get along with one another and keep a warm atmosphere with their peers, the better they can raise their performance and efficiency of work. To put in simple, every working place is concerned with sharing ideas, talking to peers, and solving problems with colleagues; thus, someone who is able to build an appropriate relationship with his colleague or boss, he better would be able to express himself, share his notion, and talk the working problems he is facing, to his peers. In this vein, because he has a very positive impact on his colleagues, they would become helpful for him to solve his problems, leading toward his desire achievements in the workplace. This result reflects on the group projects as well; in today's world, most of work in any company is group-based, thus, employees are needed to be able to interconnect with one another strongly. In this regard, the worker who has the ability to relate to other well, also has the ability to express his ideas about the project, make peers, who are shy, reluctant, or introvert, to talk about their notions articulately. Therefore, they would be able to endeavor and seek the unified goal of their project and their own goal as well.
Second, by relating well to others, individuals would better attract their potential customers, which plays a pivotal role in every business holder's successfulness. To expand, in this competitive world, every person makes strenuous effort in order to sell her product or service as much as she can. In this manner, she needs to forge a strong sense of relation with purchasers to capture their heart as well as their trust, which is satisfied only if she can become able to relate to suchlike people very well and properly; customers are always attracted in companies whose staff not only are eloquent but also have a strong sense cementing their relationship with customers based on their personalities. Therefore, suchlike worker would accomplish her goal, selling a tremendous amount of service, by attracting true and potential customers. Although some individuals might study hard and become well-educated in school, but they would have a very hard time in their working time if they cannot interact with others and customers as well; this is because they would not be able to bond with the customers the as the way customers expect a service provider to relate to them, thereby losing most of the potential customers.
To sum up, the ability of relating well with people is a crucial factor, with the foundation of which workforce would achieve their desire accomplishments during the working time. This is due to taking the above-discussed reasons into account; that not only would workers be able to raise their working work efficiency with the help of their peers but they also would maximize the rate of gravitating their probable service buyers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, as well as, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 52.1666666667 190% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3239.0 1977.66487455 164% => OK
No of words: 639.0 407.700716846 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06885758998 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02776782673 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66795669973 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455399061033 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 982.8 618.680645161 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 18.0 4.94265232975 364% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.6716834854 48.9658058833 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 179.944444444 100.406767564 179% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5 20.6045352989 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169337310341 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668027796689 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586979158484 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12654854551 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04876516138 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 11.7677419355 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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