Some people believe that the internet has brought people closer together by making the world smaller. Others disagree, claiming that the internet has made people and communities more isolated because they no longer need to leave home and interact with others. [No opinion] Discuss both views.
No need to say, in today’s world the internet has affected people’s lives worldwide. Now, some people claim that the internet has brought people together by shrinking the distance between them, however, others counter the opposite view by stating that it has disengaged people because they do everything by internet without any interaction with others. Both views have merits as will be demonstrated in the following essay.
First, the internet has made it more convenient for people to do meaningful works for each other which brings them closer to one another. To clarify, the internet is used as a helpful instrument in variety aspects of today’s people’s daily life, developing business, sharing ideas, providing information, and most importantly recognizing other’s pain. To concentrate on later mentioned concern, there are many institutions and campaigns working in the line of helping humans, in which case, communication network can become vital-useful. To illustrate, when an earthquake happens, its news spreads online, thus, individuals and campaigns can help those people by transferring money or goods just by browsing in the charity websites. For example, I remember the earthquake of Varzaghan --one of the cities of Tabriz in Iran--it was unbelievable how people all around the world volunteered to help afflicted people after a few hours; although the real distance between them was thousands of miles, but their heart was very close because of the internet. Had not been the internet, probably people would have been homeless for months.
That being said, some people consider that clicking on the button is a means to apart people from each other. In other words, of course social media, online shops, and other activities which are internet-based can impact people's lives adversely by prolonging their distance. Considering online markets, when a hypothetical person purchases his jeans, food, drink, shoes just by navigating through the internet, he would not come face-to-face with the people around him because his needs are home just by clicking some buttons!. Meanwhile, it can impact him habitually, lessen his tendency to direct communication, and as a result make him separate from others.
To sum up, cyberspace can not only bring people to each other meaningfully but also disconnect them in the real world at the same time. Thus, it is up to everyone to decide their engagement and amount of being on the internet.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, thus, while, for example, of course, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2085.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34615384615 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91254174361 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.8283827456 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.0 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.401584592536 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129671812899 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101815899519 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245017570441 0.150856017488 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101633665233 0.0645574589148 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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