Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
It goes without saying that in this competitive world where we live, people are struggling with a variety of problems to mature their children in a way that their children will be more successful in the future. While some people believe that studying hard in school is extremely important to success in the job in the future, others hold a view that it would be better for students to know how to relate well with others. Personally speaking, I firmly concur with the former group. To substantiate my point of view, two significant reasons are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, by studying hard, students can be aware that they must be hardworking to get their aims, which would be definitely beneficial for future careers. Today, some schools get difficult exams to evaluate their students, so students have to study hard to get their own favorite grades. This hardworking study enhances student's patient and learns them that life would be tough. Studying hard would be a great opportunity for students to learn this fact that they should try hard in order to achieve their goals in their lives, especially in their jobs in the future. If they do not try so hard, they cannot succeed in their jobs. For example, when I was a schoolboy, I did not like chemistry and I had many problems in this field. So, I had to work intensely to got a better grade. Therefore. not only did I get my favorite grade but also I learned that I must work so hard to achieve my aims. After, when I started my job as an amateur, I try over and over, and now I am a professional manager.
Secondly, being a well-informed successful person lies behind studying hard; If students study hard, they will be knowledgeable and gain more information about subjects that it helps them in future careers. These days, most of the companies are looking for staff who know related information about their work as much as possible. So, graduated students who have adequate knowledge have more job opportunities. After they are hired, they have a chance to promote their position thanks to their knowledge.
In conclusion, taking two reasons mentioned above into account, I do believe that in order to be prosperous in future job students should be study hard rather than communication ability with people. Studying hard not only can learn that each goal is achieved by trying so hard but also learn more useful information to students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2013.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80429594272 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65251030436 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501193317422 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.5237316103 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.947368421 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271315948605 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082941723974 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751410880721 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191553990543 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523626524751 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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