Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
It goes without saying in this depressive and sophisticated world where we live, people are struggling with a variety of problems so that they need traveling as a way in which people can release their anxiety. While some people believe that traveling to foreign countries is more beneficial than traveling in their own country, others believe the opposite of this view. Personally speaking, I agree with the former group. To substantiate my point of view, two significant reasons are being explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, traveling to foreign countries can expose us to the second language which, in turn, leads to developing our brains. When we travel to a new country, to meet out necessary needs we have to communicate with native people who live in that country. So, we should know some words of this country’s language to speak with its people. Psychologically, accustoming to the second language ends up developing our brain structure. For instance, my cousin was an accountant, after two years he decided to be a globe trotter. He was traveling all corners of the world and accustomed to different languages. Now, he completely knows five languages and psychological test proves developed his brain structures.
Secondly, people can acquire information from the culture of the country, where they travel to it, and can broaden their own horizons. Every country has many various their own rites or culture. By traveling to different countries, people can attend native and religious celebrations; Therefore, they get information about the positive habitats of other countries so that broaden their insight. To put in a more vivid picture, the more people traveling to different countries, the more broadened their horizons. For example, one of my friends is touring a lot of varied civilizations. Since he got a vast knowledge about other nations and experienced different situations, he is the best counselor for me.
In conclusion, taking two above-mentioned reasons into account, I firmly believe that people benefit more from traveling to foreign countries in comparison to traveling to their own country. By touring other countries, Not only can people expose themselves with other languages to develop their brains but also they acquire broad information about the cultural ceremonies of other countries.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1980.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32258064516 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96747408017 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543010752688 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7355364529 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.210526316 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5789473684 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375617934359 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114920085546 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110552699001 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249791784076 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658289450096 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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