Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, in this progressive world where we live, competition among human beings in order to be a successful person has augmented. In this regard, some people believe that prosperous people are risk-taker, and they try so many new things; meanwhile, others have an opposite viewpoint, and they are on the opinion that successful people are doing what they know how to do properly. From my perspective, I concur with the former group. In what follows, I will elaborate on the most outstanding reasons.
To begin with, successful people achieve invaluable experience by taking a risk and learning novel things. Risking to accomplish some action has a chance of success or failure. According to an optimistic viewpoint, should success occur for people, they will attain their desire conveniently. Nevertheless, in an ominous situation, provided people go wrong, they will not be a loser guy so that they will learn from their experience with a view to using it in the next try on. Hence, in either situation that I mentioned, people will not be a loser by taking a risk. For example, One of my friends, Lisa has a risk-taker character and she craved to be a wealthy girl. Therefore, she invested in the Stock to win money. Although she occasionally failed at first, she gains so many new experiences from her failure and makes utilize them in the other investigations. Consequently, successful humans have a thirst for risk to experience new things.
The other equally substantial reason is that successful people are seeking to drive up their self-confidence in society by taking a risk and learn new things. Confidence has been said, is like a muscle , if people want to strengthen it, they should develop it by doing some tasks, in particular, taking a risk . As taking chance need courage, people ought to break down the barriers, they will perceive that they are a valor person. Furthermore, when risk-takers feel the bravery, their self-confidence will heighten. Consequently, they accomplish a brilliant success and make significant progress in their life. For instance, last week, I read an article in a major newspaper about learning fundamental ways in order to climb the ladder of success. Some researchers evaluated the students’ amount of taking risk capability, and then they stimulated their self-confidence level. Eventually, scientists figure out a person containing the more risking character, possessing the more self-reliance.
To wrap it up, having all the aforementioned reasons into account, prosperous people pave the path of success by taking a risk and learning new things. Not only do risk-takers experience multiple new things, but they will also intensify their self-confidence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in particular, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2275.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21788990826 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10231297948 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54128440367 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3549440153 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9130434783 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9565217391 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.65217391304 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272531568199 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814614465325 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716714217251 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197909014103 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433606139004 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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