Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in today’s progressive world where we live, human being is exposed to learn various subjects due to the developing of Technology. In this regards, the era create the wide space in order to be succeful person in a particular context. It has a debate among psychologist that, each individual should enable to handle the critical situation and capable to do a best in particular or different topics. I hold the view that, taking the risk and try to use diverse matter is the good way to approache be a successful person. The reasons to support my idea are illustrated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, trying new matter can make the human opportunity to be as a problem solving. Undeniebly, no one can acquire different solution unless they move toward several ideas and try to find out. For instance, last year we had in trouble with the website maintanence in our company. After a while, my manager tried to figure out the issues and worked on it for almost three nights. Hopefully, he experienced different methods and took a risk and find the new solution to fix that problem. As a result, it was a best traffic on our website and made the boom of our company.
Furthermore, it is no secret to anyone that, every individual has special talent which they can not realize unless to pursue the diverse items. For example, when I graduated in Chemistry field, I started to explore in numerous field and worked on that era.In this way, I worked in many career such as Computer Technician, Scientist, Driver and Musical player and after along time, I figure out I has special skill in music playing, Consequently, I could be a professional musician. If I did not try diverse matter, I would never discover my inner gift.
In conclusion, having considered above-mentioned reasons into account, I firmly believe that, the way can create the condition to be flourished is experiencing variety concept. Also, the distinction between succeful people and normal people is ability of making the solution in cricis situation and it is not obtain unless they take the risk to try different matter.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...due to the developing of Technology. In this regards, the era create the wide space ...
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Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...he critical situation and capable to do a best in particular or different topics....
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Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...o fix that problem. As a result, it was a best traffic on our website and made th...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...n numerous field and worked on that era.In this way, I worked in many career such ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun career seems to be countable; consider using: 'many careers'.
Suggestion: many careers
...ed on that era.In this way, I worked in many career such as Computer Technician, Scientist,...
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Message: Did you mean 'a long time'?
Suggestion: a long time
...st, Driver and Musical player and after along time, I figure out I has special skill in mu...
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Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...er and after along time, I figure out I has special skill in music playing, Consequ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'obtained'.
Suggestion: obtained
...ution in cricis situation and it is not obtain unless they take the risk to try differ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83561643836 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7821995373 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572602739726 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1101347292 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.3125 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8125 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137776603653 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447331764378 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423850211197 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0800813178407 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379043922416 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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