Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A successful currier is a vital part of a person's life. The time students invest in themselves while studying plays a huge role in getting a good job and also, their capability to interact profoundly with surrounding people. No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of this idea. As far as my opinion is concerned, I really think that the person's ability to connect well with people is more important than studying hard in school to be successful in the future. I believe this way because of several reasons, and I will mention two of them in subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, the more interactive we are with people, the more we learn. By meeting different people, you understand the demand of the real world even better, which can never be learned just by studying hard in school. This interaction also helps to develop problem-solving abilities, empathy for others, and a willingness to work together for a common good which is essential to get success in your job. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter is profoundly influenced by my own personal example. 5 years ago, when I was in medical school I was a very limited person. I used to concentrate just on my studies and had no interaction with any other doctors working in the school. One day I was doing a group study with my class fellows and what I found as a hardworking student was astonishing that they know more about the topic we were discussing than I. Then I realized after their suggestion that I should communicate with seniors so that I could learn about the update information and also the real-life scenario. After that day, I opened my self over time and developed a skill to get along with people. Ultimately, that ability to relate well with people made me almost an expert in my field by the time of graduation. As a result, it played a strong role in becoming a senior doctor at work.
Secondly, the ability to work in a good relationship with colleagues as a team is key to success because it meets the demand of nowadays as companies prefer employees who have teamwork abilities, especially when working on big projects. Moreover, the efficiency and communicating skills of employees lead them to more opportunities in their future. Drawing from my own experience I had in London when I went on a trip with a pharmaceutical company. I and my colleagues had to work there as an intern for a month but we completed our task very efficiently in just 2 weeks as we were working in a team. During that period, I realized the importance of working together and relating well with people to get success in a future job.
In light of the reasons I mentioned, I strongly believe that a good connection with people is very important to flourish in life because you can not only learn about your field of interest but also working in a team is preferred by companies. That's why I really think that people should have the ability to interact well with other people if they really want to excel in their currier.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...successful currier is a vital part of a persons life. The time students invest in thems...
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Line 1, column 365, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...n is concerned, I really think that the persons ability to connect well with people is ...
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Line 7, column 244, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...ng in a team is preferred by companies. Thats why I really think that people should h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2493.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63382899628 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75150513918 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481412639405 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 787.5 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3673462197 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.391304348 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3913043478 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.60869565217 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268346911196 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766095577753 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764022841375 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174348140356 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244638989171 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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